The Big Plastic Dump
I step into a dump with plastic bottles and garbage.I feel disgusted because I have to clean up everyone’s mess. I see green and white plastic bottles on the ground. I hear trucks on the road. I hear cars on the road above the dump. I hear plastic bottles cracking on the ground. When I step on the caps they are hurting my feet. I step into the dump and I hear plastic bottles cracking on the ground under my feet.
Hi Mackley, well done for getting your writing finished and on your blog. Remember to write an introduction saying what you were learning to do in this writing.
ReplyDeleteYou have described sights, sounds and feelings, and you've written in present tense. Your next goal should be to add some more detail to your sentences.
Mrs Idle
Hi there Mackley my name is Ehsan in Room Manukau at Waikowhai Primary School. I really liked how you described the picture very carefully.
ReplyDeleteIt made me think of falling inside a hole and lots of rubbish inside.
Maybe next time you could add a little bit more writing.
If you would like to see my learning the link to my blog is...
http://wpsehsank.blogspot.com/